2014考研英語寫作160篇:放手去愛(考生作文批改及評分)_跨考網(wǎng)

　　寫作原文

　　From the picture above we can see that there are three trees in the picture, and one of them is growing very strongly.(用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，且strongly運(yùn)用不合適?？筛臑閛ne of them grows very well) However, the other two trees (去掉)look like very small. If you take a(去掉) careful notice, you’ll find that a tree has become bend(bent) because of (去掉，因?yàn)楹竺媸莻€(gè)句子)the big tree hostile his development. (the big tree holds back its growth)The drawer(drawer是抽屜的意思，painter) of the image aims at revealing a common phenomenon in our country, children today are generally spoiled. There are two major reasons for the problem. On one hand, as the reform of population policy, most families are allowed(加to have)only one child who is usually regarded as the ‘a(chǎn)pple’ of parent’s(parents’) eye. Therefore, parents are always try (trying) their best to provide their child with everything they want. On the other hand, lacking the awareness of bearing hardships is also an important reason that can not be ignored.I think it is imperative that we should take some effective measures. To begin with, our government can modify the policy that allows families to raise more than one students(child). In addition, the most (加effective或者important之類的形容詞) measure of all is that we should cultivate the sense of dependent. Only in this way, can we meliorate the problem in the near future.

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